Post by Jack on May 21, 2008 20:42:53 GMT -5
How to Make Your Post Totally Descriptive
Whee~ I shall talk about descriptiveness and some tips you should know! For those of you out there having trouble making posts "lengthy" or "descriptive" this is all for you!
Let's start out with a small post! I'll show you ways to make it longer with some easy tips. Here's the post:
Magic walked in the street.
She saw someone.
"Hi!" She said.
Talk about why your character is there. Usually people start off with the action first-which is perfectly fine-but it's always good to know why your character is where they are. This is especially true for your first post in a new thread. Simply describe what brought your character to said place. By doing that you add lots of detail to your post and also give your character a bit more realism.
Example: Magic walked in the street. She was walking to the bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit.
She saw someone.
"Hi!" She said.
Describe your character's emotions and thoughts. I always make a point to describe the emotions a character is feeling or reacting to something. People usually assume the person your RPing with will know how the character is feeling or thinking. You can ALWAYS describe emotions and thoughts during any post. Not only does it make your post longer and more interesting but it also makes your character "alive".
Example: Magic walked in the street. She was walking to the bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit. She was utterly happy to do this-this small trivial task-feeling wonderful simply for helping out by a little bit.
She saw someone. She considered this slightly odd and she was confused by the person's presence for they were lingering in the middle of the street. Magic was also hesitant, she was never good around strangers often very shy indeed. Is he okay? She wondered, nearly stating the question aloud. As always she felt compelled to comfort this stranger.
"Hi!" She said.
Describe what your character senses. This means to describe what they are seeing, smelling, hearing, or tasting. Adding this gives one the sense of your character's environment.
Example: Magic walked in the street. She was walking to the bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit. She was utterly happy to do this-this small trivial task-feeling wonderful simply for helping out by a little bit. Almost at once she could smell the sweet aroma of freshly baked bread.
She saw someone. It was a man by the looks of it-no older than her. His back was hunched, he was gazing solemnly at the ground, lips pursed with disgust while his fiery red hair drifted in the breeze. She considered this slightly odd and she was confused by the person's presence for they were lingering in the middle of the street. Magic was also hesitant, she was never good around strangers often very shy indeed. Is he okay? She wondered, nearly stating the question aloud. As always she felt compelled to comfort this stranger.
"Hi!" She said.
Describe the place. I consider it boring to describe the place a character is located but it's always good to do so. Really all you need to describe is what the place around your character looks like. Easy to do my friends!
Example: Magic walked in the street which was worn with age, the black pavement cracked and dirty from it's use. Flanking her sides were many busy stores, all brightly lit for the night, goods settled before the windows so as to attract customers. However, there was no one out this late. It had to be nearly ten o' clock P.M. for it was very dark and the stars above twinkled merrily in their spots. Oh yes, this street appeared to be abandoned, but Magic thought little of it. She had a mission at hand!
She was walking to the bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit. She was utterly happy to do this-this small trivial task-feeling wonderful simply for helping out by a little bit. Almost at once she could smell the sweet aroma of freshly baked bread.
She saw someone. It was a man by the looks of it-no older than her. His back was hunched, he was gazing solemnly at the ground, lips pursed with disgust while his fiery red hair drifted in the breeze. She considered this slightly odd and she was confused by the person's presence for they were lingering in the middle of the street. Magic was also hesitant, she was never good around strangers often very shy indeed. Is he okay? She wondered, nearly stating the question aloud. As always she felt compelled to comfort this stranger.
"Hi!" She said.
Describe the character. Now, as a final suggestion, describe your character. What you could add is what your character looks like, their habits, and their past. This tells the other person you are role-playing with what your character is like. This I suggest you do with every post. You can add detail by detail, slowly revealing everything about the character with time.
Example: Magic walked in the street which was worn with age, the black pavement cracked and dirty from it's use. Flanking her sides were many busy stores, all brightly lit for the night, goods settled before the windows so as to attract customers. However, there was no one out this late. It had to be nearly ten o' clock P.M. for it was very dark and the stars above twinkled merrily in their spots. Oh yes, this street appeared to be abandoned, but Magic thought little of it. She had a mission at hand!
She was walking to the Bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit. She was utterly happy to do this-this small trivial task-feeling wonderful simply for helping out by a little bit. Almost at once she could smell the sweet aroma of freshly baked bread.
She saw someone. It was a man by the looks of it-no older than her. His back was hunched, he was gazing solemnly at the ground, lips pursed with disgust while his fiery red hair drifted in the breeze. She considered this slightly odd and she was confused by the person's presence for they were lingering in the middle of the street. Magic was also hesitant, she was never good around strangers often very shy indeed. Is he okay? She wondered, nearly stating the question aloud. As always she felt compelled to comfort this stranger.
Magic tucked a stray brown hair behind her ear, something she did when nervous, and stopped in her tracks. Her brown eye's widened as thought frantically of what to do. This stranger reminded her vaguely of her friend from when she was young. A girl named Suki who often played with her at the playground. Her mother had insisted that such a girl had never existed, but Magic was adamant that she did. Just as this stranger was, she had been alone before she had met her. And just as she had with Suki Magic was going to befriend him.
"Hi!" She said.
They're other words than "said". Just a side note: use words other than "said". Can't think of any? Here's a few: muttered, cried, screamed, exclaimed, mumbled, murmured, whispered, insisted, asked, and questioned.
Example: Magic walked in the street which was worn with age, the black pavement cracked and dirty from it's use. Flanking her sides were many busy stores, all brightly lit for the night, goods settled before the windows so as to attract customers. However, there was no one out this late. It had to be nearly ten o' clock P.M. for it was very dark and the stars above twinkled merrily in their spots. Oh yes, this street appeared to be abandoned, but Magic thought little of it. She had a mission at hand!
She was walking to the Bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit. She was utterly happy to do this-this small trivial task-feeling wonderful simply for helping out by a little bit. Almost at once she could smell the sweet aroma of freshly baked bread.
She saw someone. It was a man by the looks of it-no older than her. His back was hunched, he was gazing solemnly at the ground, lips pursed with disgust while his fiery red hair drifted in the breeze. She considered this slightly odd and she was confused by the person's presence for they were lingering in the middle of the street. Magic was also hesitant, she was never good around strangers often very shy indeed. Is he okay? She wondered, nearly stating the question aloud. As always she felt compelled to comfort this stranger.
Magic tucked a stray brown hair behind her ear, something she did when nervous, and stopped in her tracks. Her brown eye's widened as thought frantically of what to do. This stranger reminded her vaguely of her friend from when she was young. A girl named Suki who often played with her at the playground. Her mother had insisted that such a girl had never existed, but Magic was adamant that she did. Just as this stranger was, she had been alone before she had met her. And just as she had with Suki Magic was going to befriend him.
"Hi!" She cried.
So there you have it! A few tips to make your posts more descriptive! I CERTAINLY don't expect you to make every single post this long. I know that I won't. This was just a guide to keep you from using one-liners and getting writer's block. Maybe a few paragraphs would be nice for an opening post, or your first time posting in a thread, but you definatly don't need to write all this for every post. That would actually get quite annoying. Thanks for reading, guys!
[/size][/center][/font][/color]Whee~ I shall talk about descriptiveness and some tips you should know! For those of you out there having trouble making posts "lengthy" or "descriptive" this is all for you!
Let's start out with a small post! I'll show you ways to make it longer with some easy tips. Here's the post:
Magic walked in the street.
She saw someone.
"Hi!" She said.
Talk about why your character is there. Usually people start off with the action first-which is perfectly fine-but it's always good to know why your character is where they are. This is especially true for your first post in a new thread. Simply describe what brought your character to said place. By doing that you add lots of detail to your post and also give your character a bit more realism.
Example: Magic walked in the street. She was walking to the bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit.
She saw someone.
"Hi!" She said.
Describe your character's emotions and thoughts. I always make a point to describe the emotions a character is feeling or reacting to something. People usually assume the person your RPing with will know how the character is feeling or thinking. You can ALWAYS describe emotions and thoughts during any post. Not only does it make your post longer and more interesting but it also makes your character "alive".
Example: Magic walked in the street. She was walking to the bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit. She was utterly happy to do this-this small trivial task-feeling wonderful simply for helping out by a little bit.
She saw someone. She considered this slightly odd and she was confused by the person's presence for they were lingering in the middle of the street. Magic was also hesitant, she was never good around strangers often very shy indeed. Is he okay? She wondered, nearly stating the question aloud. As always she felt compelled to comfort this stranger.
"Hi!" She said.
Describe what your character senses. This means to describe what they are seeing, smelling, hearing, or tasting. Adding this gives one the sense of your character's environment.
Example: Magic walked in the street. She was walking to the bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit. She was utterly happy to do this-this small trivial task-feeling wonderful simply for helping out by a little bit. Almost at once she could smell the sweet aroma of freshly baked bread.
She saw someone. It was a man by the looks of it-no older than her. His back was hunched, he was gazing solemnly at the ground, lips pursed with disgust while his fiery red hair drifted in the breeze. She considered this slightly odd and she was confused by the person's presence for they were lingering in the middle of the street. Magic was also hesitant, she was never good around strangers often very shy indeed. Is he okay? She wondered, nearly stating the question aloud. As always she felt compelled to comfort this stranger.
"Hi!" She said.
Describe the place. I consider it boring to describe the place a character is located but it's always good to do so. Really all you need to describe is what the place around your character looks like. Easy to do my friends!
Example: Magic walked in the street which was worn with age, the black pavement cracked and dirty from it's use. Flanking her sides were many busy stores, all brightly lit for the night, goods settled before the windows so as to attract customers. However, there was no one out this late. It had to be nearly ten o' clock P.M. for it was very dark and the stars above twinkled merrily in their spots. Oh yes, this street appeared to be abandoned, but Magic thought little of it. She had a mission at hand!
She was walking to the bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit. She was utterly happy to do this-this small trivial task-feeling wonderful simply for helping out by a little bit. Almost at once she could smell the sweet aroma of freshly baked bread.
She saw someone. It was a man by the looks of it-no older than her. His back was hunched, he was gazing solemnly at the ground, lips pursed with disgust while his fiery red hair drifted in the breeze. She considered this slightly odd and she was confused by the person's presence for they were lingering in the middle of the street. Magic was also hesitant, she was never good around strangers often very shy indeed. Is he okay? She wondered, nearly stating the question aloud. As always she felt compelled to comfort this stranger.
"Hi!" She said.
Describe the character. Now, as a final suggestion, describe your character. What you could add is what your character looks like, their habits, and their past. This tells the other person you are role-playing with what your character is like. This I suggest you do with every post. You can add detail by detail, slowly revealing everything about the character with time.
Example: Magic walked in the street which was worn with age, the black pavement cracked and dirty from it's use. Flanking her sides were many busy stores, all brightly lit for the night, goods settled before the windows so as to attract customers. However, there was no one out this late. It had to be nearly ten o' clock P.M. for it was very dark and the stars above twinkled merrily in their spots. Oh yes, this street appeared to be abandoned, but Magic thought little of it. She had a mission at hand!
She was walking to the Bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit. She was utterly happy to do this-this small trivial task-feeling wonderful simply for helping out by a little bit. Almost at once she could smell the sweet aroma of freshly baked bread.
She saw someone. It was a man by the looks of it-no older than her. His back was hunched, he was gazing solemnly at the ground, lips pursed with disgust while his fiery red hair drifted in the breeze. She considered this slightly odd and she was confused by the person's presence for they were lingering in the middle of the street. Magic was also hesitant, she was never good around strangers often very shy indeed. Is he okay? She wondered, nearly stating the question aloud. As always she felt compelled to comfort this stranger.
Magic tucked a stray brown hair behind her ear, something she did when nervous, and stopped in her tracks. Her brown eye's widened as thought frantically of what to do. This stranger reminded her vaguely of her friend from when she was young. A girl named Suki who often played with her at the playground. Her mother had insisted that such a girl had never existed, but Magic was adamant that she did. Just as this stranger was, she had been alone before she had met her. And just as she had with Suki Magic was going to befriend him.
"Hi!" She said.
They're other words than "said". Just a side note: use words other than "said". Can't think of any? Here's a few: muttered, cried, screamed, exclaimed, mumbled, murmured, whispered, insisted, asked, and questioned.
Example: Magic walked in the street which was worn with age, the black pavement cracked and dirty from it's use. Flanking her sides were many busy stores, all brightly lit for the night, goods settled before the windows so as to attract customers. However, there was no one out this late. It had to be nearly ten o' clock P.M. for it was very dark and the stars above twinkled merrily in their spots. Oh yes, this street appeared to be abandoned, but Magic thought little of it. She had a mission at hand!
She was walking to the Bakery to retrieve some bread her mother had ordered that morning. Her mother had been awfully busy, tending to her sick father as it was, so Magic happily agreed to do such an easy task to ease the lives of her parents if just by a little bit. She was utterly happy to do this-this small trivial task-feeling wonderful simply for helping out by a little bit. Almost at once she could smell the sweet aroma of freshly baked bread.
She saw someone. It was a man by the looks of it-no older than her. His back was hunched, he was gazing solemnly at the ground, lips pursed with disgust while his fiery red hair drifted in the breeze. She considered this slightly odd and she was confused by the person's presence for they were lingering in the middle of the street. Magic was also hesitant, she was never good around strangers often very shy indeed. Is he okay? She wondered, nearly stating the question aloud. As always she felt compelled to comfort this stranger.
Magic tucked a stray brown hair behind her ear, something she did when nervous, and stopped in her tracks. Her brown eye's widened as thought frantically of what to do. This stranger reminded her vaguely of her friend from when she was young. A girl named Suki who often played with her at the playground. Her mother had insisted that such a girl had never existed, but Magic was adamant that she did. Just as this stranger was, she had been alone before she had met her. And just as she had with Suki Magic was going to befriend him.
"Hi!" She cried.
So there you have it! A few tips to make your posts more descriptive! I CERTAINLY don't expect you to make every single post this long. I know that I won't. This was just a guide to keep you from using one-liners and getting writer's block. Maybe a few paragraphs would be nice for an opening post, or your first time posting in a thread, but you definatly don't need to write all this for every post. That would actually get quite annoying. Thanks for reading, guys!